Tuesday, December 9, 2008

Re-LAW chapter one

Sorry about this as i think you all are sick of this by now. But after some reasoning with my dad, I decided to change the beginning of the book, so things have been changed. I am also going to look at it and change some things as i am getting ready to post each chapter. Clever eh? Well here it goes and pay close attention doncha know:




The Discovery

Matthias Night woke up screaming and disoriented. He looked up at his normally blue stone ceiling, but it was a dark grey. He suddenly realized that he had turned into a panther, and that his bed was destroyed.
“Are you alright Dark Panther?” Tim Shadow asked.
“No, I am fine.” Matthias tried to sound sure.
“But your bed…it is a wreck.” Tim Shadow replied.
“No one can pass anything by you, Shade.” Matthias chuckled.
“I’m guessing you had some kind of a horror dream.” Tim raised his eyebrows.
“No I didn’t.” Matthias replied.
“You had too, only scary dreams can make us change into that state of being half animal and half man. Tell me the dream.” Tim tried to command.
Matthias knew there was no arguing with him, because Tim was right. So Matthias decided to tell him the dream.
“Well, I heard an alarm. Then I was running. I saw to guys running with bags of something. We ran around blocks until finally they found themselves cornered in a back ally with no place to go except through me. I asked them who they were. None of them answered. I walked up to them. One took off his helmet and I saw a skeleton head. Then, he picked a weird gun up and shot me. That’s all I can remember…” Matthias answered.
“Hmmm, that is a weird dream.” Shade admitted.
A loud alarm whistled.
“Dark Panther and I will get it!” Shade yelled out.
Dark Panther, or Matthias and Shade, or Tim started to run. Dark Panther turned into a panther, and started running faster. Shade turned into a bat and started flying. They rushed to the bank to open the door only to be slammed right back outside as two thugs ran out.
“Get them!” Dark Panther growled.
They chased them around corners and corners.
“These guys look exactly like the ones in my dream!!!” Dark Panther realized half stunned.
“Oh great.” Shade replied.
The thugs ran into a dead end.
“Who are you?” Dark Panther yelled raising a bow and notching two arrows on the string.
“I won’t repeat myself. TALK, NOW!” Dark Panther roared.
“And, why would we tell you that.” The one who came out of the door first said in reply.
He had a gun hidden behind him in the hands of the other guy. The first one leaped out of the way and a shot rang at Shade; but Dark Panther moved them out of the way. He shot the arrows that he had just notched. Both the thugs were knocked out from the blow.
“Wait. There’s something wrong. THIS IS A TRAP!” Dark Panther yelled. Before he could move two more shots rained out and knocked the heroes both senseless.
“To late heroes! HAHAHA!” A nasty voice bounced off of the building walls.
An eagle swooped out to which owned the voice. Then a coyote glided in its shadow.
“Aye, looks like your lights are out.” He announced while bristling.

* * * *

“It’s been hour’s sense they left!” Red Raven muttered out.
“Aye, it’s not like them at all!!” Snow Hawk said as he paced.
“This isn’t right. They would have come back right after they finished and let us know if they were onto something!” Silver Otter yelled for the whole mountain to here.
“CALM DOWN! Knowing Dark Panther they’re probably alright.” Gray Wolf replied instantly; chiding his fellow teammates.
“Okay, but I still don’t like it at all.” Silver Otter said calmly.
“Me too.” Came Red Raven’s instant reply.
“Me three.” Snow Hawk answered.
“Same here with all. But we have to do something. If they were in trouble, their radar flashers would appear.” Gray Wolf announced.
And; as if to his assumption, the radar flashers appeared. They ran to the screen to look at a big map. It showed the base in green; and a yellow arrow was above the spot where the flashers were.
“Okay; let’s get going.” Gray Wolf said as he shifted to a wolf; and he started to speed away.
“Alright.” The trio said as Snow Hawk turned to a hawk, Red Raven shifted to a Raven, and they carried off the now otter shape of Silver Otter.

* * * *

“This is where their flashers appeared.” Silver Otter said in an annoyed voice.
“Yeah!” Red Raven replied.
“Honestly, that means something is really wrong.” Snow Hawk announced.
Gray Wolf sniffed the air and cocked his ears in a rotation movement.
“Hold on, I am picking something up. It sort of smells like Dark Panther and Shade but it is faint…” Gray Wolf peered at a building shadow.
“There they are!” He pointed to the shadow of a building.
“That is an shadow covering them! They’re really right there!” Gray Wolf said again.
They moved forward. Suddenly, without warning a figure leaped and landed a well placed kick on his lungs…sending him hard into a dumpster. Red Raven swung his axe at the coyote. The coyote dodged and charged at him.
“Oh no you don’t, gruesome dog!” Red Raven said as he swung at the shield with fire around the edge of it.
There was a mad clinging sound when the raven fought slicing as hard as he could at the shield. Snow Hawk flew up and was aiming at the mad fighting coyote. Suddenly, right before he let the arrow fly to strike the would be victim coyote, he was blasted by a golden beam. The Golden Eagle stepped out.
“Sorry, but no one pulls the drop on my partner.” Golden Eagle said as he aimed his golden ray gun at the raven.
Snow Hawk charged. He banged into the eagle and he lost his target. Instead the eagle knocked his partner out cold.
“Same here eagle.” Snow Hawk replied.
Red Raven threw a net on top of the now unconscious coyote. Then he took to the air to help his friend deal with the twice size of him and his friend eagle. Gray Wolf stood up. He ran to the shadow and struck the shadow shield. The shadow disappeared; revealing the sleeping Dark Panther and Shade.
He cut them loose with one of his spears.
“Thanks mate.” Shade said.
He also took to the air to help the raven and hawk to take down the golden eagle.
“Well done.” Dark Panther said as he notched an arrow and aimed at the eagle.
Shade slammed into the eagle knocking him down for a moment. The Eagle flew up and started to attack where the used to be bat was. He looked around.
“Where is that blind bat?!” The Eagle screeched. “I will rip his wings off.”
“Sorry, he’s not on your menu!” Snow Hawk said as he tried to hit the eagle with an arrow.
The eagle tarried in air a moment. The eagle flew back up; only to be pushed from behind downward. He flew up and grasped something. The thing he grasped came visible, revealing the bat. He tossed the bat to the ground and pounced on it. Shade yelled in stress. He disappeared all completely.
“Where is that coward?” The eagle yelled at the invisible bat.
“Oh great, you probably shouldn’t have said that.” Red Raven corrected him.
“Well I’m not you; I’m a golden eagle, who isn’t afraid of a teeny bat.” The eagle said proudly as he cocked his head.
Red Raven shook his head at the eagle. Suddenly, the eagle yelled in pain as Shade began to stab with daggers. He tore, stabbed, and swiped. Each time the eagle turned to attack thin air.
“Should I save the eagle?” Dark Panther asked.
“Not on your life! The eagle never should have said that, and now he’s getting what he really deserves.” Silver smiled.
“You’re evil Silver, very evil. Dark Panther, save the eagle, or we won’t be able to question it!” Gray said to Dark Panther.
“Well, with that in mind…” Dark Panther trailed off as he let go of the string.
SNAP! The arrow shot off the string. A perfect shot from the best archer. The eagle lay in sleep from the shock.
“Sweet dreams; EAGLE!” Gray Wolf called aloud.
“Yes, we will need answers when you wake up; and if you don’t want to be interrogated, I’d speak up when we awake you.” Dark Panther said.
Snow Hawk shuddered.
“Trust me; you don’t want him to interrogate you…” Snow Hawk said, and then a shiver went up his spine.
Something edged at him. He felt something he didn’t at all like.

* * * *

When they were all at the base; Dark Panther took two electric arrows and stabbed them at the Eagle and Coyote. They both jumped at the shock.
“Aahhh!” The Eagle screeched.
He lunged at Dark Panther. Silver Otter leaped and landed on the eagle, sending him to think twice. Suddenly, the Eagle got the best of Silver Otter; he clawed him harshly. The otter which was stunned screamed. Gray Wolf leaped right into the eagle, and slammed him head first on the wall. He swung him onto the floor. Shade leaped and was on the eagles back. Swiftly; he swung a knife to the eagle’s neck.
“Okay, Okay! You beat me!” The Eagle said in a sly manner.
Suddenly, the coyote; that had not said or done anything, pounced on Shade. Gray Wolf leaped and sent the coyote sprawling into the wall. Drawing his spears, he rushed the coyote. The problem was; he was moving way to fast. In a swift move, the coyote dodged a second before a spear shafted right where he was a second before, and wedged right into the wall. He tried to loosen it hard, and finally it wedged free; and he tumbled backward. The coyote swung his shield; and on nice target, sent Gray Wolf tumbling forward into the wall. He took his sword out and started to slice really fast, making Gray dodge wildly.
“You know, we should have taken that one’s weapons away.” Shade suggested.
Gray Wolf made a wrong move. The sword would have come down upon the cringing Gray Wolf; but an arrow struck the coyote and shocked him. Gray grabbed the handle, pulled, and kicked the coyote flat in the stomach. The coyote went sprawling and hurtling toward the middle of the room. At the same time, the eagle was attacking Shade viciously; until Silver made a nice kick land on the eagle’s chest. He flew into the coyote. Before they were able to recover, they heard a click. They fell back to the floor and looked up to see an axe aimed at them, as well as six arrows, two spears and four arrows from a crossbow. At that, they decided to remain still.
“Okay. Give up. If you move so much as an inch, without being told, you’ll get a nasty shock; with several sharp things aimed at you.” Dark Panther summarized.
“Okay.” The coyote said.
“And I thought the FOX was the slyest animal. I thought eagles were to be mean and tear things apart, but I never thought that an eagle could be sly.” Shade thought aloud.
“Aye, we should probably figure him out.” Snow Hawk winked.
“Okay, who are you?” Dark Panther inquired; he aimed his bow at the captives.
“I’d speak up if I were you…” Snow said; knowing what would happen if they didn’t.
“Well, you’re not me.” The eagle said daringly.
Without warning, Dark Panther let two arrows out of his bow, they both crashed into a terrified eagle.
There was a bright light. The heroes shut their eyes tight. The eagle screamed as he was thrown into the wall. Then Gray kicked him back out to the middle.
“Now; you should probably speak up.” Dark Panther said as he aimed four arrows at the eagle.
Painfully, the eagle let out, “My name is Golden eagle. We come from a society named…” He passed out from the shock of the two arrows.
“Dang, he passed out. Okay coyote, you better continue.” Dark Panther aimed the four arrows at him.
“My name is Celestial. I will continue. We come from a society known as the Cold Hearts-“
“Yea, I could have told you that.” Red said annoyingly.
Celestial glared menacingly at him and continued. “Our mission was to bring you guys down. To bring you to them. First, those thugs were supposed to take you out with that ray gun. But, we didn’t think that you’d know. So, Golden Eagle took the ray gun in the shadows, to take you both down. Celestial paused.
“I’ve heard of them. They’re a bit better than us.” Dark Panther said, knowingly.
“Yes. Shadow Spear must have telepathically given you the information in the form of a dream. The Cold Hearts live mainly in an ice cavern; as you probably would have guessed. We could join your side; after all we never really liked them anyway. They treated us as if we were owned by them. The easiest place to take is probably the far west base, if I remember correctly.” Celestial thought.
Suddenly, Dark Panther grinned. Shade smiled.
“Dark Panther. You have a plan. Don’t think I didn’t see that grin. Where do we start?” Shade said as he chuckled.
“Waking up Golden Eagle.” Dark Panther said; trying to stifle a giggle.
“No, SERIOUSLY!” Shade said in a really serious voice.
Dark Panther could not hold it in anymore. He burst out laughing.
Suddenly, Celestial, Snow, and Red all started laughing. The laughing was paused.
“What?” Shade said.
Then they all roared with laughter.
“NO SERIOUSLY WHAT!?” Shade yelled at the top of his lungs.
Then Golden Eagle woke up.
“Well what just happened eh?” Golden Eagle stood fast in attention as he leaped up.
They started laughing again, also Shade.
Golden Eagle shrugged.
“Okay, heheheee. We need to get on with the oh HAHAHA. We need to get on with the plan.” Dark Panther said while trying to stop from laughing.
I just wanted to post the change to draw in more attention, so that once this is published (Which will take absolutely forever) you won't say,(And I know some of you wouldn't, but just to be sure) to others that oh, gosh this isn't really an interesting book as i remember it. I just want to be sure.
LEEMAC oh wait, hold on a second. I forgot i changed my name.
MAC OVER 'N OUT!
p.s. is it any more interesting now that i have made a few changes, wot?

21 comments:

George said...
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sherlock said...

Well, the beginnings "horror dream" might want to be changed to "nightmare". But that's all!


This busy High School-er (spell check always wants to say "scholar" lol) has to run back over to FLVS.

Take Care Ben!

Mac said...

So y' mean y' like it so far?

Jincy Songer said...

Hi Ben,
These is an awesome story your doing a great job!

And um I don't know who you are "sherlock" but I take FLVS also. I'm taking Language Arts, Math, and geography.

Mac said...

Sherlock is like an older brother to me that i've never had. A great friend.

Jincy Songer said...

Iv got 2 bros one is 19 and the other is 11

Mac said...

Are you the youngest, or middle?

Jincy Songer said...

Middle

sherlock said...

Okay, I'm challenging you to post about the message this sunday, no matter what it's about!

sherlock said...

(p.s)

this is older-brother advice.
Just read your comments on those little girl's blog (decided to check your blog circle lol). When someone posts about how cool something will be, don't post about how lame it actually is. Unless if it's someone like me. But for most people this will often hurt feelings. Espiecally little girls, who in my expirience cry rather often.

Jincy Songer said...
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Jincy Songer said...

What who has the little girls blog?

sherlock said...

I don't know. Lost track. Not you kiddo. ;-)


jk, ben and his sisters can't stand it when I use terms like "kiddo". I'm not that much older than them.

Mac said...

Won't happen Sherlock, because i was sick sunday. I left when the message started. Plus, the blog i think you're talking about is your movie blog. Or are you talking about another? Because i'm pretty sure that Mattea is older than me, as well fe. So which blog are you talking about?

sherlock said...

Ummmmm. One of Jincy's friends blogs. Don't know how I found it. The ones who were going to disney. . .

I shouldn't waste time blog hopping though.

New post!

sherlock said...

New Post!

Mac said...

Ohhh, that would be Karah and Victoria Harrington. Candace's little sisters, if Damaris told you about her... Yes Sherlock, i should do a new post.

Jincy Songer said...

Oh ya its Victoria and Karahs blog. Have you guys read twilight or seen the movie? The book it a lot better. In da movie tha guy is like really gay acting and its kinda funny sometimes.

Jincy Songer said...

Ya don't call me kiddo. xD

Mac said...

Joe can do whatever he wants. By the way Joe, internet is free of speech, just so ya know.

Jincy Songer said...

Well he can call me kiddo but I would like it if he didnot.